"On Our Way Home" was the first one-shot I started writing last summer, I think. I hadn't touched it much since then; it was barely over a page and needed some major re-vamping (please forgive the pun).
I'm thinking that, unless I run into a major case of writer's block, I should be able to complete this story as a special Easter gift (in addition to Chapter 31 of PbF).
So here's the beginning of it...and I hope that you like it (or absolutely adore it!!). And yes, it's short.... :(
"On Our Way Home"
EPOV from New Moon
After helping Bella into the window seat, I placed her backpack in the small compartment over our heads while Alice slid hers next to it. I gently closed the door before moving in from the crowded aisle as tired tourists filed past us, toting their carry-on bags. Sliding into the aisle seat, I gazed once again into the beautiful eyes that I had never thought to see alight with life again.
Bella gave me a tight smile, the same smile I had seen pass over her features only a few times since we left Volterra hours ago.
There was something very wrong with that smile, haunting me, mitigating the joy that had exploded within me in that shadowed alley as I realized that I held a living, breathing Bella in my arms, the joy that had been renewed when our safety became a reality as Alice guided the stolen sedan out of Volterra limits.
Thankful for the wide first class seats that Alice had insisted upon, miraculously obtaining them with much sweet talking and several generous bribes, I lifted the dividing arm between our seats, placing my arm around Bella's too-thin shoulders and pulling her against my chest. Now she could sleep at last. Ignoring Alice's frantic whispers to Jasper on her cell from the seat behind me, I sighed as I noted again the changes in Bella's appearance: the deep purple circles under her eyes, the dull paleness of her face, the lankness of her once-shiny hair, the loss of fifteen pounds of weight, and, most concerning of all, the tug-of-war behind those beautiful brown eyes. Gazing into them once again as I cupped her thin face in my palm, I saw her love for me war with uncertainty, hurt, anxiety, and, worrying me the most, fear.
What was Bella afraid of now?
So, please, let me know what you think. And, yes...it's short and terse...still in rough draft form. But I have always been captivated by these scenes in the book and with my opportunity to play in Edward's POV...why not?
Have a wonderful week, my writerly and readerly friends!!
Warmly,
Cassandra :)
I think it's absolutely lovely, as usual. :) I also have always wondered at Edward's thoughts in scenes such as this one and I think you capture his internal debates quite well.
ReplyDeleteThank you, my dear!! I just worked on it some more, and I hope to complete it in a few days. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading and commenting!!
I love this! I was rather dissappointed when I read New Moon to see that these particular pieces were never really divulged to us, so Im so thankful that you wrote this amazing piece!! Edward in particular was one of my favourite characters in New Moon - so to hear from him at this point of the story is wonderful!! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, Aveen!!! I really love writing Edward's POV...I'll be covering the flight back and I'm not sure how far into their time in Forks. We'll see. I'm on the 6th page right now, so it will probably be multiple chapters. ;)
DeleteThank you so much for your kind words, my friend. :)
Much love,
Cassandra :)
i loved it as always with your stuff and i think you would write it beautifully! you write his pov so well anyway love ya girl
ReplyDeleteAwww, thank you, my friend!! I'm actually juggling writing three stories right now; when I get frustrated with one, I start working on another one, LOL! But today I'm planning to complete my rough draft of PbF's Ch 31 (it's coming along nicely after I stayed up until 2AM this morning working on it) and work more on this one, too. After I get my online class all caught up, I plan to WRITE today!! :)
DeleteThank you for your lovely support and encouragement, Tiffanie. I doubt I'd still be writing fan fics without everyone's wonderful support!!! :)
Much love,
Cassandra :)
*Thud.*
ReplyDeleteYes, that was the sound of my body falling out of my computer chair and onto my unforgiving floor.
I'm officially dead.
You're writing from Edward's POV again? And you doing it with one of my most favorite angst-scenes of the original books? Are you *serious?*
That's it! I know it's true. You ARE trying to kill me. My teenaged-heart will just not be able to handle this kind of emotion that you're throwing at it.
Don't believe me? This did me in:
"I sighed as I noted again the changes in Bella's appearance: the deep purple circles under her eyes, the dull paleness of her face, the lankness of her once-shiny hair, the loss of fifteen pounds of weight, and, most concerning of all, the tug-of-war behind those beautiful brown eyes. Gazing into them once again as I cupped her thin face in my palm, I saw her love for me war with uncertainty, hurt, anxiety, and, worrying me the most, fear."
*Double thud.*
*Dead.*
;D
Sorry about killing you. You know I love you and I would never kill you on purpose, right?
DeleteHope you can pick your undead-but-partially-bruised self up off your unforgiving floor and read the rest of the story when I publish it. I'm not sure when it's going to end, though. What do you think? We're almost back to Atlanta now....
Glad you're enjoying it, the tiny thing that it is. I think I'm at 4 pages now. I'm also working on a non-canon one from EPOV in which he did not return for Bella in New Moon; the main portion is set ten years after he leaves; I have about seven pages on that one. But I need to complete PbF's Ch 31 first.... ;)
In a writing mood this week since I'm not homeschooling.... ;)
Love,
Cassandra :)